Fury: Pirate Queen

[Ravvij]

In the yeah 20,037,38 The Pirate War. Pirates were among the strongest groups of soldiers throughout the universe. Their merciless tactics often made whole world burn like a star.
Shariphia, a young Wulf girl was a victim to a Pirate raid. Her ship, a public transporter, was shot by an energy blast. It spin wildly to the surface of a damgerous planet.
Shariphia awoke from the crash. She'd been tossed out a broken view port when the ship crashed. Her clothes were torn and bloody. She searched the ship after the flames died down, for new garments. He luck turned for the better when she found not only clothes, but food and suplies as well.

Shariphia had been able to live off the suplies for 2 years. Her once desirable figure turned to a trim and well-cut, muscled body. She was quick in the trees and silent as a sirpent.
She forged knives from the reckage of the ship to deffend herself with.
Durring her usual walk over the top of the wrecked ship she watched as another ship crashed down to the surface, followed by the same Pirates that had shot her down. She gathered up enough suplies to follow the two ships and headed after them. She climbed over mountains and through thick forest-like jumgles.

(That's all for now...)

[mofaldor]

"She forged knives from the reckage of the ship to deffend herself with." should be put before "She was quick in the trees and silent as a sirpent." also defend is spelled with one 'f'. you should have put in 'not only clothes, but food and supplies' it makes it more fluid.
i was confused when you put yeah instead of year in the first sentence. other than some oher errors in spelling its pretty good man. keep 'em coming